I'm a member of Toast Masters' Club. We members have to have some roles at the meeting. I became an evaluator last time.
my message to my friend
"Conguratulations!! You gave a good speech as usual. I really like listening to your speech everytime as your speech has good content and hearing your soft voice is comfortable.
When I read your speech title ,I wondered what E-tegami was. You put a lot of beautiful Etegami on the bord before giving your speech. So we understood what E-tegami was easily. Your topic is nice because nowdays we wonder if e mail and cell phone are good for our comminucation or not.
One of your obejective is to select precisely the right words required to communicate your idea clearly and vividly. Your words and phrases describe how to draw E-tegami very vividly so that we were able to imagine it well. I couldn't understand some words ,for example "awkward" though.
Another your objective is to avoid lengthy words and sentences ,and jargons. Your sentences were short enough to understand.
You used body languages while speaking.
I'll give you one advice to ameliorate your speech more. Your speech was like reciting poems but you should stress one important part with loud voice in order for us to understand what you wanted to say in your speech.
I'm looking forward to listening to your next speech."